Wildest Temptations

Instead of explaining the emphasism, you could use italics , or bold the world. Also, it could use a bit of revising grammar wise. I liked it. Very detailed. I ...

I really like it, although there were some spelling errors. But other than that, It think that overall your story was very good, and it kept me hooked. Good luck, ...

Wow, I liked how you went from Nate to Pamela. More details though. Also, in the next chapter, will you explain about the clip. To me, it would seem like ...

I really like this. It is catching. Reminds me of a book I read, but it doesn't copy it. I think a bit more detail would bring you more readers, ...

I really enjoyed this story, although the spacing was kind of weird. It was really detailed which I like, and it kept me reading. I think that you should really ...

I really enjoyed this story, although the spacing was kind of weird. It was really detailed which I like, and it kept me reading. I think that you should really ...

When Celia's mother hugged her, and said "I love you," I nearly cried. I could feel my tears welling up. This is a great story, keep up the good work. ...

Ignoring the spelling and grammar errors, I'd say that this was an amazing piece of writing. It was very detailed, and stuff like that draws the reader in, and helps ...

Wow. That was interesting. Keep up the great work. I really liked it. I also love the name.